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[freyakitten]

Today I feel like telling the world about my favourite bit of angsty poetry. I wrote this piece in year 11. Admittedly, I was being a bit of a pain to deal with, as I'd finished all the work we had to do in the first ten minutes of the class, so when I asked the friend sitting next to me for a line to start a poem with, she gave "If someone doesn't kill me soon". The rest just seemed to flow on from that perfect start...

If someone doesn't kill me soon,
I think I soon shall die;
And if I go from this poor earth,
Well then, so shall I;
And if I come back to some place,
I think I shall come too;
And if I want to do something,
There's something I shall do.

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[reynardo.livejournal.com]

*sigh* - so if I throw you the line:

I stand between the shadow and the storm

maybe you can do something with that. It would make a great last line but I can't work out how the rest should go...

[freyaw.livejournal.com]

How about a start? This is what my brain comes up with as a first verse - you'll note that I tend to write in the same structure of ABAB rhyming things most of the time, and I go nuts when the rhythm doesn't scan right when the words are right... So I start with a line, I look for a rhyme, I find something that fits that isn't the pits, and then I scrub it up a bit. I can't for the life of me write limericks. ;) I'm not sure if it's go the feel you were going for, but here it is anyway:

I knew I'd have to fight if I wanted to be free
I just wish it didn't have to take this form.
Here's what I am; Here's what you see:
I stand between the shadow and the storm.